Question by atoosa: I am writing a screenplay for a short-film for my film-making class, what do u think about this…?
I am writing a screenplay for a short-film for my film-making class, I don’t know how to end it , and I ‘d be glad if u tell me if the idea is good or not.
Bellow I write a brief of it:
A girl is going to her university. She takes a taxi. It’s 30 min to her university. All through the way when she looks at different shops and buildings she remember different memories of the past of her life and she completely drowns in these thoughts for a few minutes and then the next place and the next thoughts come to her.
Then we hear her thoughts with her voice:
– How well it was if he called me after these 3 years, I would tell him all these damned things that has happend to me in those days. Oh god I don’t know if he still loves me, after this marrige, after this damned marrige and this divorce.
-Maybe I shall call him and tell him the story.NO I ‘ll send him a message.
She starts to send a message :
She writes : Hello. I am anna. Do u remember me?
She erases the the message.
again she writes: Hi petre 🙂 I am anna. I have so many things to tell u…
Again she starts to delete what she wrote word by word.
Now she is in front of the university building.
The taxi man calls her, she is drowned in dreams.
She pays him and she stands in front of the uni building still looking at her mobile phone. She pauses for a while than she delete the message. A drop of tear drops on the phones screen. She put the mobile phone in her pocket and goes through university.
Answer by adl_tx
To be honest the story is not that good.
I read it and it doesn’t really click.
It is nothing that I can say would stick
in my mind.
I don’t want to discourage you, but your
story so far is not that good.
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