Question by Pretty Unpretty: My essay introduction / possible pile of crap. Can anyone please point me vaguely in the right direction?
I have to write an essay comparing the four main aspects of love (platonic, romantic, familial, betrayal) between Wuthering Heights and the Constant Gardener (a film). I have a first draft of an introduction done but I’m really not sure about it.
Any help would be appreciated. Is it decent? Pretentious? Confusing? Downright bullsh*t? (if you’ll excuse the language)
For a race that has pretty comprehensively managed to master the mathematical capabilities of triangles, the ability to annoy people on public transport in new and more inventive ways, and how to send a spaniel into space, we appear to still be completely incapable of defining what really should be the most simple thing in the world. Love.
Perhaps the closest we have ever come is the realisation that love is different for everybody. And perhaps one of the most apt examples of such inconsistency (in what should rightly be the one constant in life) is the comparison between the two texts I plan to discuss. This comparison, I hope, clearly illustrates how simply because love can differ, depending on the particular people and relationship that they share, does not mean it is not ‘true love’, as it were.
Of course, at a first glance, it would be easy to dismiss the idea that there are any similarities between the two texts. How could there be, when Wuthering Heights is a time-tested tale of passionate, near-demonic love, and the Constant Gardener is a modern production detailing a couple’s struggle against Third World drug testing? After all, there is variation, and then there is just plain irrelevance.
And yet, how easily the relationships explored throughout the two texts can be sorted into four simple categories. Romantic love, familial love, platonic love, and betrayal, eight little words that cannot possibly hope to capture in the intricacies and downright incongruity of many of the relationships, but still are ultimately necessary if I can even hope to define and compare ‘love’ in a mere essay.
Answer by mistymas
its too busy at the start too many big formal words that made me think wtf is this all about. try to simplify it dont assaut the listeners with a barrage off formality ease your way into it imagine you are talking to your best friend.Dont ramble stick to the main topic which is love and the different ways people percieve to love .I really like the second paragraph so I would keep that as it is,I think it leads nicely to the last summing up and it makes me want to read the essay in question.I tottally get what your trying to say but feel you could be a little more light hearted because love and all its different facets is still the most wonderful emotion in the world. this is just my personal opinion hope it helped in a small way
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