by Matt Woolner
Question by ▐▀▀▼▀▀▌ ► V.I.P ◄ ▐▄▄▲▄▄▌: what should i add to my essay?
my essay needs to be 600 words but i only have 347 words
what else should i include. i think its fine but idk what do you guys think (if you have time to read) thanks sooo much!
Pushing the envelope to a whole new level is always lingering at the back of my mind when I set foot to begin a new task. Ultimately, when I am engaged in an activity, I always push my self to the extreme, to the edge of the cliff. New doors are unlocked in this way. I, however and still in the process of to unraveling and unchaining one important door in my life.
I come from a pretty average family. My parents have not had the opportunity to get the education they wished for. My mother was born on a ranch in Mexico and could not attend school due to transportation issues. My father dropped out of school. I look back and it motivates me to do my best to get the education they never strived for, to show who I am and what I can do. A question still remains: Who am I?
I see all my high school peers happy and content with their plans for their future. I’m constantly bombarded with the question of my plans for my future. Ashamedly, the answer is always “I don’t know yet”. I don’t know yet who I am. I do, however, know what my passion is: The passion for film production and special effects. I did not realize this passion until about 4 years ago when I first started analyzing and watching others edit and develop their films online. The power of being in control appealed to me. Your desires and expectations are at your hands. I see media all around me and wonder why not me, humans design the media. Might as well be me.
It is hard to discover who you are and what your future is. You discover new things daily, which subsequently changes your view and passion for something else. That’s why I follow what I enjoy and eventually landed at where I am today. Who I’m meant to be is behind the locked door and will remained locked for a longtime. After all isn’t that what life’s about, Finding who you are?
thank you so much for helping me and not bashing me on my paragraph.
im going to add a paragraph on who i hope to become.
thanks sooo much for your help.
Answer by secret asian man
this is an essay? wow, ok first you need 5 paragraphs, an intro, a conclusion, and 3 body paragraphs for your support. and you need a thesis, your thesis should be a sentence that states what your essay should be about.
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